ielts essay3 6.5 problem

(The decline in sports participation among young people has become a significant concern in recent years.)

The decline in sports participation among young people has become a significant concern in recent years.

(This trend can be attributed to various factors, including the growing popularity of indoor activities)

This trend can be attributed to various factors, including the growing popularity of indoor activities

(such as video games and the mismanagement of public sports facilities.)

such as video games and the mismanagement of public sports facilities.

(Addressing these issues requires a combination of parental encouragement and government intervention to)

Addressing these issues requires a combination of parental encouragement and government intervention to

(promote sports and make them more accessible and appealing to the younger generation.)

promote sports and make them more accessible and appealing to the younger generation.

(One of the main reasons is the rise of indoor activities such as internet video games.)

One of the main reasons is the rise of indoor activities such as internet video games.

(Many young people choose to play these games, and it takes them long hours to do so.)

Many young people choose to play these games, and it takes them long hours to do so.

(For instance, there is a well-known large video game competition called e-sports.)

For instance, there is a well-known large video game competition called e-sports.

(E-sports has millions of participants and offers high prize money.)

E-sports has millions of participants and offers high prize money.

(The players need to practice extensively for the competition.)

The players need to practice extensively for the competition.

(Therefore, it is hard for them to find spare time to play sports.)

Therefore, it is hard for them to find spare time to play sports.

(Another factor is the poor management of public sports facilities.)

Another factor is the poor management of public sports facilities.

(Some facilities have strict rules such as prohibiting the use of balls or requiring silence during play.)

Some facilities have strict rules such as prohibiting the use of balls or requiring silence during play.

(These rules make young people turn away from sports.)

These rules make young people turn away from sports.

(A solution to the first problem would be for parents to encourage their children to participate in sports.)

A solution to the first problem would be for parents to encourage their children to participate in sports.

(Furthermore, it is the government's responsibility)

Furthermore, it is the government's responsibility

(to promote sports through social media and public schools.)

to promote sports through social media and public schools.

(The second problem can be fixed by)

The second problem can be fixed by

(the government simply changing the rules to be less strict and more flexible for young people.)

the government simply changing the rules to be less strict and more flexible for young people.

(In conclusion, I strongly believe that more young people should be encouraged to play sports)

In conclusion, I strongly believe that more young people should be encouraged to play sports